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This is Fantasy Boys XXX entry for the fourth Drabble Cascade.
For more information on the cascade, see the HOME post.
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Author's Note
As soon as I read the word, spice, I instantly thought of spice caravans and deserts, but, of course, these sci-fi merchants aren't travelling by camel.
As soon as I read the word, spice, I instantly thought of spice caravans and deserts, but, of course, these sci-fi merchants aren't travelling by camel.
by Sophie Duncan
The winds told me of him before the caravan appeared on the horizon and I watched it approach, the floaters groaning with sweet spices from beyond the Great Ridge.
Another exotic held my attention, though.
I stood alone in the street, the foolish boy not afraid of strangers, for I knew better than the Elders. Dust flew as the incomers settled their craft, but I fixed on him as he climbed off his sandhover, pushing back a deep hood. Tall, dark of skin with even darker eyes, he gazed evenly on me, not knowing me yet, but I knew him.
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SO the word was spice? I liked your post about what you thought of when you read the word spice. I especially liked the phrase the foolish boy not afraid of strangers
ReplyDeleteHi, yes, the word was spice :)
DeleteThanks for responding, I'm glad you liked the drabble.
Nice. I like how with a few choice words you've drawn a picture of the boy and his community, also giving a strong sense of things fated to come.
ReplyDeleteThanks.
DeleteI agonised over this one, chopping and changing every single word at least once, and mostly more, because I had such a clear picture in my head and I wanted to capture it all. I'm finding when words are limited that I can do a lot with the reader's inference, i.e. what's between the words that isn't written - I really think drabbles are improving my word skills and I hope it'll come through in my longer stuff :).
Some day you must take these drabbles and make longer stories out of them.
ReplyDeleteI want to know what comes next. The slow seduction or are you going to torture them first.
A few of them have sparked off something that is lasting in my brain, so they will materialise. This one had so much back story in my head before I started it was silly, but I have to work on an actual plot ;P
Delete*sigh* Another lovely little bit that has whetted my appetite.
ReplyDeleteI will get to writing some longer stuff once A to Z is over and I'm not writing blog posts every waking hour ;P
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